[RenPy] Neighbor's Family v 0.3

GNG_games · Jul 19, 2017

Hello everyone!

I ask you to appreciate my first experience in creating a visual novel - Neigbors's family! I hope you enjoy the game and it will get good reviews.

Plot the story :
You've got a role of a simple guy, to whom one fine morning the neighbour knocked at the door, asking for help.

Before you there is a choice with several varantami, from which will depend the further development of events. For example, deciding to pay more attention to the mother of the main character, you will lose the opportunity to contemplate the storyline associated with the daughter and you will have to replay first again. Also, in the future, you will open additional functions related to the mutual relations between the characters, for example, influence on debauchery, sympathy and submission.

Neighbor's Family v 0.3

Download Links:

For PC: https://goo.gl/Ej6kwf

For MAC: https://goo.gl/K6AMQt

SUPPORT ME: http://patreon.com/gng_

Hoboy · Jul 19, 2017

Uhh - links don't work...

asestado · Jul 19, 2017

Hoboy said:
Uhh - links don't work...

His patreon links work at least.

Giving a bit of feedback for the demo I would say the following:

-Rushed: Everything on that demo was too fast for the development. Even more, it seems that more than you being the one corrupting others it seems the other way!, you are almost like a prey there XD.

-Conversations are kind of strange: I think it is kind of related to the other point but the conversations are fast, too much to the point and kind of bad. I would recommend you to take your time while writing them.

I would say that only the art part is good for now. However I got the exactly opposite feeling than what you said, it almost feels as if the main character is in danger with those females

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And of course you need more information about the "rol" that you give to the players, do you have family?, what is your work?, any hobbies?, personality?. I would recommend adding an introduction so that people can feel better the rol that you are giving them.

For example: "You are a man that has always lived the moment, at school and university you always chose to have sex and cute girls rather than studying and your good looks helped you quite a bit on that point. However time never stops and now you are just a normal worker on a company, a part of you regret that you didn't study harder but even so you really enjoyed your sweet times with those girls.

Nowadays you haven't been able to get a stable relationship and are quite bored with your usual life, however a family moved next door and it may make things more interesting for you..."

That's a short introduction, however if for example he had a sister it could compare her success with him and may make him feel inferior, if you had parents they can be a bit dissappointed that you didn't achieve success.

The starting event with the girl calling to your door is mostly ok, however perhaps it's kind of weird that you change pov so easily, it feels like haughty insertions that aren't needed, you could achieve the same by saying "is it just me or her eyes has taken a liking to my ass?". In fact I recommend that you don't use options on that initial part.

The party was the main mess if I have to say, too rushed and without any sense, almost every action seems to end in a "bad ending" like scene, asking for water being like that feels weird, and the mother attitude is too open for a married woman.