1. Not a typo, but, in the attack on Hawkethorne, Pipirita, Talulah are shown in their Wayfort maid outfits (a potential spoiler). Their descriptions seem to be that they are completely naked in during this time. Aafi is naked (but I presume that's because she doesn't have a maid outfit since she doesn't appear there with the others (yet). Should be possible to set the other two's naked busts to show up during this time and then their clothed forms if Champ sends them to Wayfort.
Hawkethorne > Talulah > Combat > Loss
2. This sentence about her tail reads strangely. At first it's okay, but then after the comma, it reads like it floats up above her head and cracks her neck and separates her arm. I don't think that image is correct. I could maybe see the part about it stretching up above her if that part was ever shown to disconnect alone from her booty, or if there was a line about her bending down really close to look at you and maybe her ass was raised, but it doesn't read that way.
Maybe it should just be its own sentence about the tail wagging and then something about her stretching her arms over her head and cracking her neck before removing one?
Talulah > Combat > Loss > Let Be
3. Should be 'joins'.
Hawkethorne > Talulah > Combat > Loss
2. This sentence about her tail reads strangely. At first it's okay, but then after the comma, it reads like it floats up above her head and cracks her neck and separates her arm. I don't think that image is correct. I could maybe see the part about it stretching up above her if that part was ever shown to disconnect alone from her booty, or if there was a line about her bending down really close to look at you and maybe her ass was raised, but it doesn't read that way.
Maybe it should just be its own sentence about the tail wagging and then something about her stretching her arms over her head and cracking her neck before removing one?
Talulah > Combat > Loss > Let Be
3. Should be 'joins'.
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