Minor grammar bug

rgoti

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Quaelle Rhoem birth. This is my second child from her. Yet its still referred as the first.

[You summon up the roehm spirit - it’s easy to do in the presence of Quaelle - and for long, long moments you just sit there hugging her, bathing in the love and peace that is radiating off her, cradling her >first< child.

“Are you happy to place her in your nursery as well?” she asks softly. “There is still room?”]

Its also missing a 'be' here:

[her, playing with your daughter’s tiny, pudgy fingers until she finally drifts into sleep.

“I will >< back at work soon,” she says at last, holding your hand. “You’ll still visit, won’t you? I feel so vibriscent in your company.”]
 

lowercase_donkey

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Apr 27, 2016
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Thanks. Spent some time with this one, and I think all that happened was the writer made a block for second and later births, copy pasted a bunch of text but missed cleaning up that one word "first". Removing it for next.

Got the missing "be" as well. She has speech quirks, but AFAIK dropping entire words is not one of them.

Ty for your report!