Looking for a bit of help

[Redfox26011]

Hey, to anyone willing. I'm kinda looking for a bit of assistance with writing a fw things for the race I created. I'm just kinda drawing up blanks on some things cuz I'm not really sure how to write them so I was wondering if anybody would be willing to help? Of course credit will be given to anyone that helps, I won't just claim your work as my own or anything like that. I'm just drawing up short on some of the scenes and could use some help.

 

[Rawr XD123]

What do you want help with

 

[ghostly.winter]

If you post your WIP in Ideas people might stop by to see what you have so far and offer help.

 

[Redfox26011]

https://docs.google.com/document/d/167OkHJ3VUw1QJKLzLETL3-jQ9Y9T2jjex9yPOkc2jXA/edit

This is what I have so Far, it's far from perfect of course and any help would be deeply appreciated

 

[Zavos]

• Some of the scenes could use some fattening up. Perhaps some extra detail to provide more context.
  
• You should add more variation. Many scenes are a mess of logic gates to account for the many, many variables of Captain Steele's appearance and attributes, the lack of contingency can break immersion at times.

 

[Redfox26011]

Thank you very much, I will do my best to work on it. I was trying to keep it a bit more acurate but I only really had my game to base it on. That's why I came for help heh