Sorry if this is in the wrong section but I noticed some mistakes, or what I think are mistakes, in the Hethia Mating Press scene. let me know if I'm overstepping with any of these. I loved the scene all up but these just jumped out at me.
Pretty sure the "in" is not needed
Word salad "feel her every flex"
Ok not really a mistake but should probably be "however she feels anything but"
pretty sure it's meant to be "combined efforts of her and your weight"
"Even as you continue"
should be "you in this kind of compromising position"?
Not sure if this is meant to be "returns" instead of "retreats"
Should be "more than a few hours"?
Meant to be "in which case"?
Pretty sure the "in" is not needed
Word salad "feel her every flex"
Ok not really a mistake but should probably be "however she feels anything but"
pretty sure it's meant to be "combined efforts of her and your weight"
"Even as you continue"
should be "you in this kind of compromising position"?
Not sure if this is meant to be "returns" instead of "retreats"
Should be "more than a few hours"?
Meant to be "in which case"?