After defeating Eryka in the Frostwood, there should be a comma instead of a period after pc.name:
When talking to Ninian about Hazards, "a few birds is" should be "a few birds are," and the comma after Ninian should go within the quotes:
When starting a fight against the pack of wolves, "nash" should be "gnash:"
When inviting Ninian to Hawkethorne, this sentence is kind of hard to follow. "for" should probably be "given," "desire of" should be "desire for," and the comma after girlfriends should go within the quotation marks. The final clause should probably be, "then Ninian closes his eyes."
When losing the pc's vaginal virginity to Evelyn, quotation marks and italics are missing on "Oh, darling:"
Missing capital on "Her ministrations" in the healing scene with Cait in the Frosthound:
When talking to Ninian about Hazards, "a few birds is" should be "a few birds are," and the comma after Ninian should go within the quotes:
When starting a fight against the pack of wolves, "nash" should be "gnash:"
When inviting Ninian to Hawkethorne, this sentence is kind of hard to follow. "for" should probably be "given," "desire of" should be "desire for," and the comma after girlfriends should go within the quotation marks. The final clause should probably be, "then Ninian closes his eyes."
When losing the pc's vaginal virginity to Evelyn, quotation marks and italics are missing on "Oh, darling:"
Missing capital on "Her ministrations" in the healing scene with Cait in the Frosthound:
