Yes it was ment for a Hard/Evil type PC, I really wanted it to be like Harley Quinn and Joker like relationship, Im really just doing this for fun and to get better at writing dialogue for characters, I have no plans for this to make it into the game.
If this is the case, I'm sorry to say but trying to emulate JimT's style of dialogue (especially Embry's) is probably not one of the best frameworks to start on in honesty. As much as I love the shy and sweet thing, she does come off exceptionally sugary more than realistically possible in most cases, and is kinda reflected in the sex scenes as well for her to where it does get to be a liiiiittle too much, lol. (And believe me, I looooove my sugar!
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I'd probably evaluate other writer's works as well as Jim's characters, as each writer has their own unique style to how they come off with dialogue. Like for example: SoandSo's work usually has a good amount of humor and witty remarks to them, and B's tends to relate more to a realistic side when it comes to interactions. As for myself, I find my prose kind of brown, usually focusing on itty-bitty details moreso than anything. Take notes and observe their individual styles, and then from that, make your own style depending on what you're comfy doing. I wouldn't out and out try to emulate someone's style from the get-go, otherwise you may fall into the same pitfalls as them~
I can admit, I did almost do the same thing starting out myself, since Embry was also one of my inspirations to start writing myself, but found doing my own thing as far as my own style was a lot more fun in the long run!
Edit: I also want to add, if picking up someone else's character, you would have to, in essence also have to adopt the author's writing style on top of that, mainly for consistency's sake, from which you will likely have to deviate from your own style in order to fit theirs. It's an extremely tough task to do, and likely burns someone out from that effort as well. Unless you really have a firm grasp on the character themselves with how they may act in x situation and how they react to y, and how z writer may interpret that, the effort is often led to some conflicting feelings for readers who have read the initial content.