Daliza typos (Jael'yn Date) [v.0.4.34)

[Ace Hangman]

[Jaelyn Date option]
Jael'yn is misspelled (needs the apostrophe) in the choice button.


[Jael'yn Date]

Touch your makeup up,

Not a typo, but would possibly read better as "Touch up your makeup" instead of the two 'up's together.


[Jael'yn Date; Subby Fuck]

to group Daliza's and Jael'yn's asses.

Should be 'grope' instead of 'group'.

just about her her swallow

Should be 'hear her'.


[Jael'yn date; SpitroastDaliza]

she doesn't pounce Daliza

Should be 'pounce on' or 'pounce upon'


[Jael'yn Date; Double Ride]

cease its contact with Daliza's in order to reach her face,

It should be Jael'yn not Daliza.

turn around and face Daliza when you finally settle down onto Daliza's face,

Should be 'Jael'yn's face' not Daliza's.

and dorps again

'drops' is misspelled

You finally give in, moaning deeply and shuddering, back arching and body shivering as ...

There should be something at the end of this sentence, like 'you cum' or 'you orgasm' or 'your body lets loose a torrent of pleasure'.

your giant-sized cock hoses a monument load across Jael'yn's cleavage and stomach down with spunk,

It should be 'monumental' instead of 'monument' but it should either be 'hoses a monumental load of spunk across Jael'yn's cleavage and stomach' or 'hoses Jael'yn's cleavage and stomach down with a monumental load of spunk'.

 

[Ace Hangman]

[Jael'yn Date; SpitroastDilaza (cont.)]

the near-painful climbs

I feel like the word 'climax' works better here.


[Jael'yn Date; Leave Them]

with just about about every passing companion,

Remove the second 'about'.

Jael'yn and Daliza head down the stairs

It should be 'come' or 'come back' instead of 'head', since they are entering the scene.


[Jael'yn Date (2nd visit)]

"but you don't want me going to the our master!"

It should be 'the master' or 'our master', depending on how Daliza views the MC (Jael'yn definitely calls MC 'master' not sure Daliza would, though they are her superior).


[Jael'yn Date (2nd visit); Join In]

"Ah! C-come on now, I need it, mistress!" Jael'yn gasps.

Not sure if this is a master/mistress variable or parser error (MC was male and called 'master' by Jael'yn every other time).

jael'yn's nuts,

'Jael'yn' should be capitalized

slammed down onto by your own throbbing length,

remove 'by'