Alissa Wayfort typos [0.7.27]

[Ace Hangman]

Dungeon > Alissa > Punishment > To The Pillory
(Behemoth makes an appearance after deciding what to do with Alissa)

1. Should be 'Oh, by The Seven' (or 'Oh, by the Seven') instead of 'oh by the seven'.


2. There shouldn't be commas bracketing this clause.


3. There shouldn't be a space between 'walls' and the comma.


Dungeon > Alissa > Sex > Hate Fuck

4. Should be a space here.


5. 'mattress' instead of 'mattres'.


Dungeon > Alissa > Sex > Get Fucked > Blue Ball Her

6. There's an extra space here.


Dungeon > Alissa > Sex > Get Fucked > Let Her Cum

7. This sentence should be italicized and there should be a space at the start of it.


Dungeon > Alissa > Sex > Suck Her Off

8. These two lines should be italicized. Her line should probably start it's own section instead of immediately following Champ's line.


9. 'Every time' should be written as two words... every time.


10.This should probably be a [pc.cumColor] parser, since my Champ's cum is honey and would be amber or yellow.

 

[Ace Hangman]

Dungeon > Alissa > Sex > Suck Her Off > Blue Ball Her

11. This comma shouldn't be here. (Normally I wouldn't bother if it was the only thing, but since we're here.)


12. This speech should be italicized and there should be a space at the start of it.


13. Should be a question mark. (Normally I wouldn't bother if we weren't already here fixin' stuff. Doubt anyone else would notice.)


Dungeon > Alissa > Sex > Suck Her Off > Let Her Cum

14. This comma shouldn't be here. Should probably be after the word 'passion'.


15. Check if this is a [pc.cumColor] parser, since I am certain my Champ's is honey.


Dungeon > Alissa > Sex > Hate Fuck (She is submissive here, not sure if that matters.)

16. Check if this is a [pc.cumColor] parser, since my Champ's cum should be honey.


17. Seems like there should be something more here.


18. Check if this is a [pc.cumColor] parser, since I am sure my Champ's cum is honey.


19. Should be a comma here.(Normally I wouldn't bother with such a small thing, but if we're already here...)


Dungeon > Alissa > Punishment > Walkies > Encourage Him

20. 'O-shaped' (Normally I wouldn't bother if we weren't already on this adventure.)

 

[Ace Hangman]

Dungeon > Alissa > Punishment > Walkies > Encourage Him (cont.)

21. This comma shouldn't be here.


22. Should be 'the audience says, holding back their laughter.'


23. Should be a comma here.