A crab's gay writings

Knife-wielding Crab

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Read through the Elaril sex swing. It seems pretty good. Very few typos. I left some opinions, some suggestions. Just one person's opinions. Others may disagree.
Having said that, my only comment might be to lean more heavily into the sex swing aspect. You managed to get a part in there near the end, but other than tying up, most of it could have been anywhere in a bed or on the ground, so just put a few more lines that take advantage of the uniqueness of the scene and situation.
Other than that, I think his dialogue didn't really mesh with his existing speech and personality quite right (not that he does a lot of talking in the other scenes). It wasn't so far off (his aggression towards Dark Knights was a bit overt, but it wasn't bad, the issue might be the reader being able to know that his sudden aggression is because of it, since they can't see parsers), I think some of his words could be a bit slurred or notes about his drunken or inebriated state (they were partying before the fight) could have been slipped in a bit, but that's all minutia and just my OCD telling me to mention it.
Nice work. Did some changes and added some more swinging. Will look more into it later.
 

Ireyon

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How's the review of your writings coming along? Anything already in the code que or just editing atm?
 

Horny Demon

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Quick question, Is Tykis in the game yet? I haven't seen him around at all and just wanted to know if he was in yet. also, if Jevon doesn't have a bust yet, I think it would be hilarious if he looked like a minotaur Steve Irwin. Just a funny thought, not trying to tell you how to make your characters.
 

Horny Demon

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None of my char is in game.

Jevon pretty much is an anthro Steve Irving (although he is a lupine, not a minotaur).
Well that explains why I haven't seen him. Also, I guess I just missed the part about him being a lupine (I mainly just skimmed through the doc)
Edit: forgot to say, I love the character idea for Tykis and can't wait for him to be added!
 
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Knife-wielding Crab

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Finished my to-do list in Odoacer part 2 doc. Gave Nikol some personality parser, added a quest log at the end of the document. I also went back to the first doc and added parsers to the sex and talk scenes, so the post-quest scenes accounts for Odo's improved personality.
 

Dbj614

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Any word on your submissions? Your content isn’t up my alley fetish wise for the most part but I’ve read most of your stuff and really enjoy your writing! Hope your stuff gets approved because your characters are all interesting and bring some new and relatively unexplored content/scenarios to the game!
 

Dbj614

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I've heard some positive response on elf boi. Also, horse-wrangler will probably get rejected. So I'll mostly be focusing on writing the completed content for elf boi, which is essentially two different NPC's-
Dang that’s unfortunate about the horse wrangler. Really enjoyed reading his doc. Glad to hear about the elf boi though!
 

Knife-wielding Crab

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Currently scribbling on corrupt Tykis and jotted down some sex ideas. I have a lot I want to do and may need to cut some of them if I ever want to finish this character. May add the cut content later on.

Ideas:

Private:
Pound him- Roughish plapping in the bed
Rough him up - Throw him on the floor next to the bed and destroy him; bitches sleep on the floor.
Tykis Lead - Tykis rails PC so the bedframe drums against the wall

Public stuff
Public BJ - Don't know if I'll make it sneaky or exhibitionist
Advertisment - Put your slut on display. Possibilities like railing him on a table or let other patreons have a go. Maybe spitroast with some lumberjacks?

Jae'lyn - Tykis does the ol' "Ooops drop my pen. Gonna bend over and tease the cock-locked bartender with my fat ass". PC can shut off the magic ring. A frustrated Jae'lyn grabs Tykis and tears of his shorts. Hilarity ensues.

Low priority
Maybe some voyeur scenes for his prostitution stuff. Also the pillory needs some love.

I want to get away from the usual "Pitch, catch and some oral". So I figured I'm gonna use that prostitution angle a lot and have scenes where he takes care of his clients.
 

Knife-wielding Crab

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Currently scribbling on corrupt Tykis and jotted down some sex ideas. I have a lot I want to do and may need to cut some of them if I ever want to finish this character. May add the cut content later on.

Ideas:

Private:
Pound him- Roughish plapping in the bed
Rough him up - Throw him on the floor next to the bed and destroy him; bitches sleep on the floor.
Tykis Lead - Tykis rails PC so the bedframe drums against the wall

Public stuff
Public BJ - Don't know if I'll make it sneaky or exhibitionist
Advertisment - Put your slut on display. Possibilities like railing him on a table or let other patreons have a go. Maybe spitroast with some lumberjacks?

Jae'lyn - Tykis does the ol' "Ooops drop my pen. Gonna bend over and tease the cock-locked bartender with my fat ass". PC can shut off the magic ring. A frustrated Jae'lyn grabs Tykis and tears of his shorts. Hilarity ensues.

Low priority
Maybe some voyeur scenes for his prostitution stuff. Also the pillory needs some love.

I want to get away from the usual "Pitch, catch and some oral". So I figured I'm gonna use that prostitution angle a lot and have scenes where he takes care of his clients.
Thinking something like this. Now this is just a normal sex scene, but I want to toy around with the "public use" theme.

You tell your cock-sheeth you had no plans for letting him go just yet; there's still some cuddling to be done. Tykis makes a tired chuckle and pulls you in for another kiss, that turns into neck-smooching as you worship the soft skin above his neck-fluff. While savoring your elf, you can hear some masculine voices from the hallway.

"Oh shit," one of the voices exclaims. "It's that whore I've been telling you guys about. Hey cutie, how about letting us join? Got some good coins for ya."

Tykis growls, that has his throat rumble underneath your smooching lips.

"Fuck off will ya," Tykis shouts and throws up his middle finger. "I'm off the clock. Why don't you go and suck each other off instead."

"Hey, a slut is shouldn't mouth off to his betters– oh shit…" The patrons quickly change their minds when you lift up your head and glare at the silhouettes in the doorway. "It's the [pc.title]. Sorry [pc.mf|sir|mistress]. We didn't mean to interrupt."

As the intruders shuffle away, Tykis cradles your face and gazes into your eyes.

"Good work, [pc.name]. Let's get back to business," he says while circling your cheeks with his claws. "Now, one [pc.raceCute]-cuddling coming up."
 

Karakara

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Ehehe, so this is a pimping route I am guessing? Nice. Do you accept any suggestions.
 

Knife-wielding Crab

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Because of upcoming life stuff I may slow down writing smut. I won't quit entirely, and I still have lots more ideas I want to work on.

I'm going to finish up corrupt Tykis, although cutting some of the content for possible expansions later on (the doc is already at 35 pages, meaning I've written a combined 135 pages of elf boi).
 

Karakara

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I am curious: why wasn't his but claimed already? Also, what would beating his alpha entail?

Still, a furry twunk? Last one we had was Room, or at least the last one I remember. Can not wait.
 
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