NPC: Azras
Scene: Blowjob
Problem: im not sure azras penis is supposed to be 2 feet Thick.
Throbbing from more excitement than she knows what to do with, the gigantic herm ripens to two feet thick and just under two feet long, twitching like a stuttering girl on prom night.
Azras cont.
Problem: unknown abbreviation.
I don't know what DSL stands for so it's safe to say that other may not know either. It probably shouldn't be abbreviated.
Streams of saliva and pre course down your chin; skittering joy tingles up and down your spine, hearty doses of venom swelling the nervous sensitivity of your peach DSL's so high that they feel no different than ordinary genitalia.
Azras cont.
Problem: typo, missing "T" in "The".
he fleshy heat of Azra's lust- burdened cock gently pressures the back of your throat, but your brain can't handle it.
Azras cont.
Problem: Redundant verbiage.
Remove either "expectant" or "pregnant". They're synonyms of each other. Also need a space between them if they stay.
Azra caresses your generous, expectant,pregnant belly even as she helps get you back in fit fighting form, equipped with all those things you really do need.
Scene: Blowjob
Problem: im not sure azras penis is supposed to be 2 feet Thick.
Throbbing from more excitement than she knows what to do with, the gigantic herm ripens to two feet thick and just under two feet long, twitching like a stuttering girl on prom night.
Azras cont.
Problem: unknown abbreviation.
I don't know what DSL stands for so it's safe to say that other may not know either. It probably shouldn't be abbreviated.
Streams of saliva and pre course down your chin; skittering joy tingles up and down your spine, hearty doses of venom swelling the nervous sensitivity of your peach DSL's so high that they feel no different than ordinary genitalia.
Azras cont.
Problem: typo, missing "T" in "The".
he fleshy heat of Azra's lust- burdened cock gently pressures the back of your throat, but your brain can't handle it.
Azras cont.
Problem: Redundant verbiage.
Remove either "expectant" or "pregnant". They're synonyms of each other. Also need a space between them if they stay.
Azra caresses your generous, expectant,pregnant belly even as she helps get you back in fit fighting form, equipped with all those things you really do need.
