[0.9.042-PUBLIC-ANDROID#3004] So. Many. Typos.

GameCrazed

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Multiple typos over several NPCs and scenes.

NPC: Ari - Love Stars
Scene by: Fr0sty

"Where to start... Well I'm Ari, obviously, and I'm also Green-Star in the Love Starz, also obviously." She scratches her chin, her tail flicking being her as she thinks. "I also live here, again obvious, I know."

Problem: i think "being" is meant to be "behind"

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Poe A: The masquerade
NPC: Holiday - Black Cat
Scene by: Adjatha

"The crate containing the black cat cases has [been] pried open, but none of the contents seem to have been disturbed."

Problem: Missing word. Add "been"

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Poe A: Black Cat Cont.

"Her shoulder(s) slam back against the wall and she opens her mouth in an 'O' of surprise as you mercilessly fuck her tender cleavage."

Problem: "shoulder" needs to be a plural. +1 "s"

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NPC: Jade - Dumpling Scene
Scene by: Altair Hayes

"You walk into Fur Effect, only to find the whole place empty save for a one of Jade's legs, which promptly disappears into the employee room, chased by tittering laughter."

Problem: got an extra "a" in there. Should probably remove it.

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NPC: Vaande
Scene by: Zeikfried

"Her thighs are your next target in your impatient sojourn to her pussy, quivering under the rape of your lips."

Notice: this one isn't a typo more of a quarry.

Im not sure if "rape" was the intended word but the scene plays as one of consensual interaction, rape usually implies non-consensual. For the sake of consistency shouldn't a different word be used?

It dosent really matter to me, I just wanted to bring it to your attention.

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NPC: Carrie - Male Milker - overload.

"Streams of semi-clear spray out from the tiny pinprick holes, rapidly increasing in size."

Notice: im not sure if this one is actually a typo considering it from a descriptor tag.
But if the PC has Gabliani Cum, Its Descriptor is Semi- transparent/clear and in several scenes across the game doesn't have a noun after it. (Ie. Shes covered in Semi-Clear.) Not Semi-clear cum The image posted is just one example.

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NPC: Mitzi

"Like you get so good at being a turned-on piece [of] fuck-meat that you're better at it than anybody else."

Problem: Missing the word "of"

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NPC: Mitzi

"Her lips shine invitingly as she tosses the drug applicator over [her] shoulder. "But Mitzi's already a dumb, leaky bimbo!"

Problem: Missing word "her".

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Theron

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You are lying on your bed naked, clothes that you may, or may not, have worn lying on the floor next to your bed. Your drenched fluffy coat, glistening with sweat], announces to your empty room what you already knew the moment you woke up.
You let go of the first zaika and are on the second before she can get another sentence out. In a split second, your tail is inside her’s and is pumping like a piston by the time she realizes what’s happened.
Since this got passed over the last time: "Hers" should not have an apostrophe.
Unless there's a dialect I don't know about where "Hi's" is also correct.
 
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