[0.9.036-PUBLIC-ANDROID#2852] NT Typos, Millie

[GameCrazed]

Here are 3 typos i found.

NPC: Millie
Scene: Faux Cow
Scene by: Fenoxo

"Fortunately, you're so turned on that you fast forget your shame. Cows have tons of fun anyway, right? You look up at Millie, unsure."

Problem/solution: i believe "quickly" is the proper word to use in place of "fast".

Scene: same scene

"That's all! You pout at Millie, though whether from the irritation of squeezing all that cognition together or from having to wait this long for your boobs to get taken care [of], you aren't sure."

Problem 1: not sure if the first sentence, "That's All!" Is meant to be a question or not.

Suggestion: if the sentence "That's all!" Is meant to be a question steel is asking. Then the Exclamation point should be replaced with a question mark. If it is also supposed convey exasperation or other intense feeling then there should be an addition of a question mark along with the exclamation point.

Problem 2: i believe there is a missing word in the last sentence.

Suggestion: add the word "of" after "...taken care" in the last sentence.

 

[Gedan]

Fast vs Quickly: Another weird wording choice that I don't think is actually fully incorrect and I'd be fine leaving it as-is as a stylistic word choice.

"That's all" feels like a slightly fucked up exasperation more than a question in this context. I think it should probably be capping off the previous sentence more than it should be standing on it's own.