Typo in the First training session with mirrin at the ten tone gym on New Texas.
Source by: SoAndSo
With a lead-in from your trainer, you slowly bend down. Your knees feel stiff but steady. As you descend, Mirrin's powerful thumbs presses into different places on your back, encouraging you to push out certain parts of your body.
Problem: Double Plural.
Suggestion: "Thumbs Press"
Same paragraph:
Particularly, your full butt feels a little strain as it perks itself out under all this weight, not to mention the way her movements makes your luscious milk-tanks push a little bit more forward. If it gives the gym regulars a show... you're a little tentative at the thought.
Problem:
Im not sure if there is something actually wrong here because i know me inglsh gud sometimes, But the "If" at the start of the sentence makes it feel like there should be more to the line. Maybe a slight rewording?
Source by: SoAndSo
With a lead-in from your trainer, you slowly bend down. Your knees feel stiff but steady. As you descend, Mirrin's powerful thumbs presses into different places on your back, encouraging you to push out certain parts of your body.
Problem: Double Plural.
Suggestion: "Thumbs Press"
Same paragraph:
Particularly, your full butt feels a little strain as it perks itself out under all this weight, not to mention the way her movements makes your luscious milk-tanks push a little bit more forward. If it gives the gym regulars a show... you're a little tentative at the thought.
Problem:
Im not sure if there is something actually wrong here because i know me inglsh gud sometimes, But the "If" at the start of the sentence makes it feel like there should be more to the line. Maybe a slight rewording?