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[0.7.6] Marefolk Village sex with Sariel
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<blockquote data-quote="teawolf" data-source="post: 439219" data-attributes="member: 51577"><p>After choosing Rim Foursome, I think "the" massive pricks should be "their"?</p><p>[ATTACH=full]35289[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>Missing comma after "instead," and the second sentence is a fragment. Should be "disappears" instead of "disappearing:"</p><p>[ATTACH=full]35290[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>Same scene, double "and"s are a little hard to follow; would change "and churn" to "churning:"</p><p>[ATTACH=full]35291[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>Same scene, missing space between "in" and "front:"</p><p>[ATTACH=full]35292[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>Based on the formatting in the second graf, missing space between "touch" and the em dash in the first graf pictured here:</p><p>[ATTACH=full]35293[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>In Anal Foursome, "difficult" should be "difficulty:" </p><p>[ATTACH=full]35294[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>Missing comma after "again:"</p><p>[ATTACH=full]35295[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>In the second sentence, "take HER harder" should be "take Wredi harder," since the previous referent would be Sariel, and the PC is fucking Wredi:</p><p>[ATTACH=full]35296[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>"Horse's" should be "horses':"</p><p>[ATTACH=full]35297[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>Commas missing after "particularly Sariel" and after "drools." After "lovers," the sentence should be either: "so many lovers. She..." or "so many lovers, and who," because of how the pronouns are working:</p><p>[ATTACH=full]35298[/ATTACH]</p><p></p><p>Cont.</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="teawolf, post: 439219, member: 51577"] After choosing Rim Foursome, I think "the" massive pricks should be "their"? [ATTACH type="full" width="659px"]35289[/ATTACH] Missing comma after "instead," and the second sentence is a fragment. Should be "disappears" instead of "disappearing:" [ATTACH type="full" width="679px"]35290[/ATTACH] Same scene, double "and"s are a little hard to follow; would change "and churn" to "churning:" [ATTACH type="full" width="679px"]35291[/ATTACH] Same scene, missing space between "in" and "front:" [ATTACH type="full" width="638px"]35292[/ATTACH] Based on the formatting in the second graf, missing space between "touch" and the em dash in the first graf pictured here: [ATTACH type="full" width="640px"]35293[/ATTACH] In Anal Foursome, "difficult" should be "difficulty:" [ATTACH type="full" width="632px"]35294[/ATTACH] Missing comma after "again:" [ATTACH type="full" width="620px"]35295[/ATTACH] In the second sentence, "take HER harder" should be "take Wredi harder," since the previous referent would be Sariel, and the PC is fucking Wredi: [ATTACH type="full" width="604px"]35296[/ATTACH] "Horse's" should be "horses':" [ATTACH type="full" width="622px"]35297[/ATTACH] Commas missing after "particularly Sariel" and after "drools." After "lovers," the sentence should be either: "so many lovers. She..." or "so many lovers, and who," because of how the pronouns are working: [ATTACH type="full" width="640px"]35298[/ATTACH] Cont. [/QUOTE]
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