I haven't been to the foothills at all on this run, and haven't officially met Lucia, Gloria OR Morwen, and got the manticore visiting Pupperidge Farm scene twice in a row, which mentions having met the manticore girl before, and implies having met Lucia and Morwen.
"Affectations" should be "affections."
Not a big deal--curved quote on 'Moo' when the standard seems to be straight quotation marks:
"Tastes" should be "taste," and "rosey" should be "rosy:"
There should be a comma after "ring," and after "it" (within the quotation marks), and the "s" in "she" should be lowercase:
"Moo's" should be "Moos:"
Should be "forces:"
Period after "meal" should be a comma, and the "s" in "she" after both quotes ("meal" and "Nothing!") should be lowercase:
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When introduced to the farm by Anna, (scene starting "Sorry, didn't mean to get too handsy..."), there's the curved quotation mark again... Hm, maybe it's a set formatting thing, and I've just never noticed before:
When meeting Lucia and Gloria for the "first time" for a grilled meal, the following period should be a comma:
Thanks!
"Affectations" should be "affections."
Not a big deal--curved quote on 'Moo' when the standard seems to be straight quotation marks:
"Tastes" should be "taste," and "rosey" should be "rosy:"
There should be a comma after "ring," and after "it" (within the quotation marks), and the "s" in "she" should be lowercase:
"Moo's" should be "Moos:"
Should be "forces:"
Period after "meal" should be a comma, and the "s" in "she" after both quotes ("meal" and "Nothing!") should be lowercase:
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When introduced to the farm by Anna, (scene starting "Sorry, didn't mean to get too handsy..."), there's the curved quotation mark again... Hm, maybe it's a set formatting thing, and I've just never noticed before:
When meeting Lucia and Gloria for the "first time" for a grilled meal, the following period should be a comma:
Thanks!
