[0.5.7] Typo/Error Minipost

[MistressAzula]

Errors found in version [0.5.7], Part 1
I'm playing the downloadable version, not on a browser.

-Some of these entries aren't strictly typos and may be or contain suggested improvements.
-Like in my previous posts, I organised the entries by association, location, etc.
-I omit any [Next]s in the choice paths (the line below the character/scene name with the forward-slashes, if present).



Typos:
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Hethia, post-Dog Days quest
/Yes



--Typo:
"...and yet with an chill viciousness lurking beneath that now-placid exterior."
--Suggested Fix:
"...and yet with a chilling viciousness lurking beneath that now-placid exterior."

--Notes:
The highlighted text and following word "an chill" should be changed to "a chilling" to make sense.
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Hethia, post Dog Days quest, sex
/Yes/Oral



--Notes:
The highlighted dialogue needs to be italicised.
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Hethia, post-Dog Days quest
/Yes/Mating Press



--Typo:
"...palpable shudder of relief.The forceful motion..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...palpable shudder of relief. The forceful motion..."

--Notes:
The highlighted text "relief.The" needs a space so that it's "relief. The".
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Hethia & Elthara, Palace of Ice, sex
/Hethia/Sex/Elthara



--Typo:
"...determined not to lose you a second time..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...determined not to lose to you a second time..."

--Notes:
Missing word; needs "to" between "lose" and "you".
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Elthara, Palace of Ice (Winter City)
/Healing



--Typo:
"Elthara screems as you shove your twin cocks into her squeezing fuckholes..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Elthara screems as you shove your cock into her squeezing fuckhole..."
--Note:
The highlighted words "twin cocks" and "fuckholes" shouldn't be plural and instead be "cock" and "fuckhole". My character doesn't have multiple cocks; she has only one.

--Typo:
"You unload massive loads into her quivering bowels and womb..."
--Suggested Fix:
"You unload massive loads into her womb..."
--Note:
The highlighted text "quivering bowels and" should be removed as it implies my character having two or more cocks. My character doesn't have multiple cocks; she has only one.

--Typo:
"When you pull out, her winking holes wink and drool with helpless desire."
--Suggested Fix:
"When you pull out, her winking hole winks and drools with helpless desire."
--Note:
The highlighted text and following words "holes wink and drool" should be changed to "hole winks and drools". My character doesn't have multiple cocks; she has only one.
Is there a reason why so many scenes mistakenly refer to my character having multiple cocks when she doesn't? I've come across it so many times it almost baffles me at this point.
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Elthara & Cait
Elthara/Sex/Sic Companion/Cait



--Typo:
" "WouldI!" "
--Suggested Fix:
" "Would I!" "

--Notes:
Needs a space in "WouldI" so that it is "Would I".
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Vari & Cait, sex, Leothran Village
/Sure/Vari & Cait



--Typo:
" "Thank you, Mia.You remind me what it is to be a woman." "
--Suggested Fix:
" "Thank you, Mia. You remind me what it is to be a woman." "

--Notes:
Needs a space in "Mia.You" so that it's "Mia. You".
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Brinne & Cait, sex
Brinne/Sex/Milk Bath



--Notes:
The highlighted dialogue needs to be italicised.
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Brienne
/Sex/Missionary/[Suck Tits/Squeeze Nips/Keep Going]



--Typo:
"...reply when she gazesdown at you and grins..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...reply when she gazes down at you and grins..."

--Notes:
A space is needed in "gazesdown" to make it "gazes down". The last choice in the path (in the brackets) doesn't matter.
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Lyceum, visiting Serena's class



--Typo:
"Your cowgirlfriend must be very curious..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Your cowgirl-friend must be very curious..."

--Notes:
Suggestion: changing "cowgirlfriend" to "cowgirl-friend".
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[MistressAzula]

Part 2
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Serena, Salamander Taphouse



--Notes:
In the tooltip for [Sex], I suggest "cowgirlfriend" be changed to "cowgirl-friend".
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Serena, Salamander Taphouse
/Sex/Massage



--Typo:
"how could it be warm?"
--Suggested Fix:
"How could it be warm?"

--Notes:
The highlighted text "how" should be capitalised "How".



--Typo:
"...your large cat-dick slowly swell and thicken to..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...your large cat-dick slowly swells and thickens to..."
--Notes:
The highlighted words "swell" and "thicken" should be plural form "swells" and "thickens".

--Typo:
"...your cowgirlfriend's hums get higher and happier."
--Suggested Fix:
"...your cowgirl-friend's hums get higher and happier."
--Notes:
I suggest "cowgirlfriend's" be changed to "cowgirl-friend's". It looks better than the three words mashed together.



--Typo:
"...and slam your knots upward into..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...and slam your knot upward into..."

--Notes:
The highlighted word "knots" shouldn't be plural and instead should be "knot". My character doesn't have multiple cocks; she has only one.
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Serena, Salamander Taphouse
/Sex/69



--Typo:
"...forgetting that there's leothrancock..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...forgetting that there's leothran cock..."

--Notes:
The highlighted text "leothrancock" needs a space in it so that it's "leothran cock".



--Notes:
Both instances of highlighted text "cowgirlfriend"; I still suggest it be "cowgirl-friend".
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Khor'minos Milk Barn
/Go Inside/Get A Stall/Get Milked/Attendant



--Typo:
"Your cocks hang between your thick thighs..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Your cock hangs between your thick thighs..."

--Notes:
The highlighted words "cocks hang" should be changed to "cock hangs". My character doesn't have multiple cocks; she has only one.
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Khor'minos Milk Barn
/Go Inside/Get A Stall/Get Milked/Attendant/Touch Me?



--Typo:
"...and the milking girl coos asher fingers wrap around your hardening cock."
--Suggested Fix:
"...and the milking girl coos as her fingers wrap around your hardening cock."

--Notes:
The highlighted text "asher" needs a space in it so that it's "as her".
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Masseuse, Teyarium
/Massage/Yes Please



--Typo:
"That's so cute!With you height..."
--Suggested Fix:
"That's so cute! With you height..."

--Notes:
There needs to be a space in "cute!With" so that it's "cute! With". Variant for player character with a very small cock.
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Masseuse, Teyarium
/Massage/Yes Please



--Typo:
"...and lets out a and lets out a gasp."
--Suggested Fix:
"...and lets out a gasp."

--Notes:
Repeating text with an unnecessary "and lets out a" in the highlighted text. Variant for player character with a very large cock.
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[MistressAzula]

Part 3
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Hobgoblins, victory against them, Undermountain
/CockSucking



--Typo:
"The hobgoblins moans..."
--Suggested Fix:
"The hobgoblin moans..."

--Notes:
In this sentence "hobgoblins" shouldn't be plural. It should be "hobgoblin".



--Typo:
"Your seed comes form in a massive torrent..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Your seed comes in the form of a massive torrent..."
--Notes:
The highlighted text "form in a" doesn't make sense. It should be changed to something like "in the form of a".

--Typo:
"Her face firmly impaled upon your shafts..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Her face firmly impaled upon your shaft..."
--Notes:
In this sentence "shafts" shouldn't be plural. It should be "shaft". My character doesn't have multiple cocks; she has only one.
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Keros, feminine
/Petition?/Get Ridden



--Notes:
The paragraph of dialogue is missing an end quotation where the highlighting is.



--Notes:
The outlined paragraph has an inexplicably random break in it.
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Elf Boy, Old Forest
/Fuck Him



--Typo:
"Your grapefruit-sized balls empties right into..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Your grapefruit-sized balls empty right into..."

--Notes:
The highlighted "empties" shouldn't be plural an instead be "empty".
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Effigies, Old Forest, victory against them
/Fertilize



--Typo:
"It's not her pistils you're interested in..."
--Suggested Fix:
"It's not her stamens you're interested in..."

--Notes:
Shouldn't "pistils" be "stamens"? It seems to be referring to the effigy's tentacles, which are phallic, and the stamen is the male organ of a flower and therefore the equivalent, correct?
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Stylists, Marefolk Village
/Sex/Rail/Aunora



--Typo:
"You strut up behind Aunora, admiring the sheer roundness of it."
--Suggested Fix:
"You strut up behind Aunora, admiring the sheer roundness of her ass."

--Notes:
Specifying "it" as "her ass" or something similar adds clarity.



--Typo:
"cum hoses out of you like the rains of a monsoon..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Cum hoses out of you like the rains of a monsoon..."

--Notes:
The first word of the sentence "cum" needs to be capitalised "Cum".
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Stylists, Marefolk Village
/Sex/Rail/Aunora/Yes



--Typo:
"You resign yourself to being the girl's sleeping partner..."
--Suggested Fix:
"You resign yourself to being the girls' sleeping partner..."

--Notes:
In this sentence "girl's" should be plural possessive "girls'". After sexing both sisters in the [Rail] option.

In addition, the highlighted paragraph is inconsistent with the text before and after it. In the previous and following paragraphs, it says you wake up with Ikora and that Aunora has already been up. But in the highlighted paragraph it details Ikora being the one that's been awake.
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Stylists, Marefolk Village
/Sex/Service/Aunora



--Typo:
"...it comes back even more fervently.She stifles back a moan as her hands betray her..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...it comes back even more fervently. She stifles back a moan as her hands betray her..."
--Notes:
The highlighted text "fervently.She" needs a space in it so that it's "fervently. She".

--Typo:
"Ikora whispers as she shudders."
--Suggested Fix:
"Aunora whispers as she shudders."
--Notes:
Wrong sister; "Ikora" should be "Aunora".
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[Alypia]

--Typo:
"Your cowgirlfriend must be very curious..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Your cowgirl-friend must be very curious..."

--Notes:
Suggestion: changing "cowgirlfriend" to "cowgirl-friend".

--Notes:
In the tooltip for [Sex], I suggest "cowgirlfriend" be changed to "cowgirl-friend".

--Typo:
"...your cowgirlfriend's hums get higher and happier."
--Suggested Fix:
"...your cowgirl-friend's hums get higher and happier."
--Notes:
I suggest "cowgirlfriend's" be changed to "cowgirl-friend's". It looks better than the three words mashed together.

--Notes:
Both instances of highlighted text "cowgirlfriend"; I still suggest it be "cowgirl-friend".

I understand the complaint, but no. I intentionally chose this spelling. It's not incorrect and creates no ambiguity. "Girl-friend" does create ambiguity, so I think it's not as good.

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--Typo:
"how could it be warm?"
--Suggested Fix:
"How could it be warm?"

--Notes:
The highlighted text "how" should be capitalised "How".

This is actually one of the few instances where capitalization rules are ambiguous, because it's a literary technique whereby the character's thoughts are contained entirely within an aside that exists within a single sentence of narration. I think that it's better not to capitalize here, so as to preserve the flow of the single sentence.

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--Typo:
"...your large cat-dick slowly swell and thicken to..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...your large cat-dick slowly swells and thickens to..."
--Notes:
The highlighted words "swell" and "thicken" should be plural form "swells" and "thickens".

Yeah, this is a multicock parser mistake. The written text is here:

Slicked with fragrant Minoan spiced oil, compressed in Serena's grasp, your [pc.cocksLight] slowly swell and thicken to full size… and as she feels you grow, your cowgirlfriend's hums get higher and happier.

It should be:

Slicked with fragrant Minoan spiced oil, compressed in Serena's grasp, your [pc.cocksLight] slowly swell[s|s] and thicken[s|s] to full size… and as she feels you grow, your cowgirlfriend's hums get higher and happier.

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--Typo:
"...and slam your knots upward into..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...and slam your knot upward into..."

--Notes:
The highlighted word "knots" shouldn't be plural and instead should be "knot". My character doesn't have multiple cocks; she has only one.

Yeah. Another multicock parser mistake.

slam your knot[pc.hasKnotOther|s] upward into her with a last scintilla of awe-inspiring force.

Should be:

slam your knot[pc.hasCocks|[pc.hasKnotOther|s]] upward into her with a last scintilla of awe-inspiring force.

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--Typo:
"...forgetting that there's leothrancock..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...forgetting that there's leothran cock..."

--Notes:
The highlighted text "leothrancock" needs a space in it so that it's "leothran cock".

Honestly, I sat for a bit over this one. The parser is:

[pc.race][pc.hasRealCock|cock|-pussy]

This parser works great for...some situations (e.g. when pc.race is elf or orc) and terrible for others, and I have no real interest in making bespoke exceptions. As such, my solution is:

[pc.name]-[pc.hasRealCock|cock|pussy]

As often happens, [pc.race] is a parser that causes way too many problems.

 

[Alypia]

Thanks for catching the multicock parser mistakes! They're very finicky.

 

[MistressAzula]

I understand the complaint, but no. I intentionally chose this spelling. It's not incorrect and creates no ambiguity. "Girl-friend" does create ambiguity, so I think it's not as good.

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This is actually one of the few instances where capitalization rules are ambiguous, because it's a literary technique whereby the character's thoughts are contained entirely within an aside that exists within a single sentence of narration. I think that it's better not to capitalize here, so as to preserve the flow of the single sentence.

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Yeah, this is a multicock parser mistake. The written text is here:

It should be:


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Yeah. Another multicock parser mistake.

Should be:


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Honestly, I sat for a bit over this one. The parser is:

This parser works great for...some situations (e.g. when pc.race is elf or orc) and terrible for others, and I have no real interest in making bespoke exceptions. As such, my solution is:

As often happens, [pc.race] is a parser that causes way too many problems.

Ah. When I read "cowgirlfriend", I saw it as a combining "cowgirl" and "friend" into one awkward word. It never occurred to me that it's suppose to be a portmanteau of "cowgirl" and "girlfriend". Thank you for the clarification.

The second point, on the literary technique pertaining to the wording of character thoughts... I see how it's suppose to be read now.
These sort of phrasings can really confuse my mind. The concept you mention is one of those kind of things that I could never remember well (or barely at all!) when I learned English. Too many strange concepts and rules that were too intangible for my mind, which is more well-suited for mechanical/engineering concepts or spatial thought. (This is a great example of why I named them "suggested corrections", as they are entirely based off of my oft-ill literary knowledge which I am quite unconfident in... Sorry for the tangent.)

 

[Alypia]

No worries! With the second one of those especially, your comment isn't wrong. Under most circumstances, you would want to capitalize something like that, and if Savin gets firm with the style rules it might get capitalized anyway.