[0.5.7] Typo/Error Collection

[MistressAzula]

Errors found in version [0.5.7]
I'm playing the downloadable version, not on a browser.

-Generally organised by association (character, location, etc)
-Some of these may be misconceptions on my part, or aren't strictly typos and instead suggested improvements
-I omit any [Next]s in the choice paths (the line below the character/scene name with the forward-slashes, if present)



Part 1
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Atugia
/Sex/BodyWorship/Face Up



--Typo:
"...echo through the rooms thick walls..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...echo through the room's thick walls..."
--Notes:
The highlighted word "rooms" should be possessive "room's".
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Atugia
/Sex/BodyWorship/Face Up/Fuck Her



--Typo:
"You lean in, stealing one kiss, another, followed by..."
--Suggested Fix:
"You lean in, stealing one kiss, then another, followed by..."
--Notes:
A suggestion: add "then" in front of "another" to read better?
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Atugia
/Sex/Facesitting



--Typo:
"...she begins eating you out with a ferocity you find it hard to rival."
--Suggested Fixes:
"...she begins eating you out with a ferocity you find hard to rival." (1)
"...she begins eating you out with such a ferocity that you find it hard to rival." (2)
--Notes:
Removing the highlighted word "it" (1) or adding in additional words earlier (2) to make it make sense and read better.
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Lyla, first time sexing
/Sex/Obey



--Notes:
The highlighted sentence shouldn't be italicised.



--Typo:
"Ow my... you really..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Oh my... you really..."
--Notes:
The highlighted word "Ow" is misspelled and should be "Oh".
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Lyla, sex menu
/Sex



--Notes:
The tooltip for [Keep Fighting] mentions my character having a vagina, but they don't have one. So shouldn't it say something like "ass" instead?
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Lyla
/Sex/Keep Fighting



--Typo 1:
"...and getting on your four legs..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...and getting on all fours..."
--Notes:
The highlighted "four legs" doesn't make sense. It seems "all fours" may have been the intention.

--Typo 2:
"She rests her cold hand on your higher back..."
--Suggested Fix:
"She rests her cold hand on your upper back..."
--Notes:
I can't be the only one to find the highlighted "higher back" almost cringe-worthy. In comparison, "upper back" sounds so much better, personally.

--Typo 3:
"Now we’re talkin,"
--Suggested Fix:
"Now we’re talkin',"
--Notes:
A nitpick: shouldn't the highlighted "talkin" possess an apostrophe at the end "talkin'".



--Typo:
" ...and not a trace of shame."Now move." "
--Suggested Fix:
" ...and not a trace of shame. "Now move." "
--Notes:
The highlighted dialogue should be italicised, and it needs a space between it and the previous sentence.
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Lyla
/Sex/Keep Fighting/Keep On



--Typo:
"...before resuming her travel to your nethers ."
--Suggested Fix:
"...before resuming her travel to your nethers."
--Notes:
There's an unnecessary space at the end of the sentence, or it's possibly missing the end of the sentence if there was suppose to be more.
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[MistressAzula]

Part 2
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Lyla & Evergreen
Lyla/Sex/Get Collared



--Notes:
Same as QQQ16; the highlighted dialogue should be italicised, and it needs a space between it and the previous sentence.



--Typo:
"Evergreen says while combing your hair."
--Suggested Fix:
"Evergreen says while combing your hair."
--Notes:
Double space between "while" and "combing".



--Typo:
"...gagging on a mouthful of cock ."
--Suggested Fix:
"...gagging on a mouthful of cock."
--Notes:
Same as QQQ17; there's an unnecessary space at the end of the sentence.



--Notes:
Same as QQQ16 and QQQ18; the highlighted dialogue should be italicised, and it needs a space between it and the previous sentence.
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Meira (Oxana's Mansion)
/Sex/MassiveKnotting



--Typo:
"...'nuki lover's given you.At the same time..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...'nuki lover's given you. At the same time..."
--Notes:
Needs a space between sentences.
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Meira (Oxana's Mansion)
/Sex/Oral



--Notes:
Should the highlighted onomatopoeia at the top of the screenshot be italicised?

--Typo:
"...squashes you into the mud and you can't even whimper..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...squashes you into the bed and you can't even whimper..."
--Notes:
I'm assuming "mud" got mistakenly copied over as an oversight from her hostile encounter (Tanuki Witch) sex scene. Regardless, "bed" or the like fixes it.
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Meira (Oxana's Mansion)
/Sex/Ball Worship



--Typo 1:
"The more the merrier,as Mom says!"
--Suggested Fix:
"The more the merrier, as Mom says!"
--Notes:
Needs a space between "merrier" and "as".

--Typo 2:
"...has her moaning and whispering instead."
--Suggested Fix:
"...has her moaning and whimpering instead."
--Notes:
It appears that "whispering" was intended to be "whimpering", not that the former doesn't make sense, rather the latter makes more sense.
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Meira (Oxana's Mansion)
/Sex/Cuddlefuck



--Typo:
"...as your 'nui paramour's dog-log seeks to push..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...as your 'nuki paramour's dog-log seeks to push..."
--Notes:
The highlighted "'nui" is misspelled and should be "'nuki".
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Senja, date (Wayfort)
/Dates/Wafort



--Typo:
"She eyes the both of you with he usual pleasant smile..."
--Suggested Fixes:
"She eyes the both of you with her usual pleasant smile..." (1)
"She eyes the both of you with the usual pleasant smile..." (2)
--Notes:
The highlighted word "he" is missing a letter and should be "her" or "the" (the former seems better).
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Senja, date (Wayfort)
/Dates/Wafort



--Notes:
A suggestion: the use of "with Senja on your arm" twice in a sentence sounds repetitive. I personally think it'd sound better by removing the second instance at the end of the sentence
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[MistressAzula]

Part 3
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Senja, date (Wayfort)
/Dates/Wafort



--Typo:
"Maintaining a shop is more about just standing..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Maintaining a shop is more than just standing..."
--Notes:
Shouldn't "about" be "than" in this sentence?
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Senja, bent over approach scene
/No



--Typo:
" "O-oh. The disappointment in Senja's voice... "
--Suggested Fix:
" "O-oh." The disappointment in Senja's voice... "
--Notes:
The highlighted dialogue should be italicised, and it's missing an end quotation.
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Hornet Eggnancy, general




--Notes:
When you have hornet eggs from Azyrran or the hive knights (Old Forest encounter) after purifying the hive. The scenes mention the hornets and the queen being corrupted still (first and final scenes). Needs to be updated, or really just have the same scenes as an eggnancy by Queen Nyzerrah (the latter would work well).
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Hornet Eggnancy, Queen Nyzerrah
/Path



--Typo:
" It's time right, it's time? Hold on. I'll help!" I’ll help!" you suck down a breath... "
--Suggested Fix:
" It's time right, it's time? Hold on. I'll help!" You suck down a breath... "
--Notes:
Unnecessary "I’ll help!"", and then the "you" right after needs to be capitalised.
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Azyrran (Old Forest)
/Talk/Flirt/Suck and Fuck



--Typo 1:
"...but this about filling her up with..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...but this is about filling her up with..."
--Notes:
Missing "is" between "this" and "about".

--Typo 2:
"If your mind weren’t wholesale tunneled in on..."
--Suggested Fix:
"If your mind wasn’t wholesale tunneled in on..."
--Notes:
The highlighted "weren't" should be "wasn't".

--Typo 3:
"When your maw comes up for air saliva and honey connects you to..."
--Suggested Fix:
"When your maw comes up for air, saliva and honey connects you to..."
--Notes:
Shouldn't there be a comma after "air"?
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Azyrran (Old Forest)
/Talk/Flirt/Cuddlefucks



--Typo:
"...grows ever-closer to true pentration; you can feel..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...grows ever-closer to true penetration; you can feel..."
--Notes:
The highlighted "pentration" is misspelled and should be "penetration".
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Rumie
/Drinks/Vodka



--Typo:
"...of filtered alcohol ride son your breath..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...of filtered alcohol rides on your breath..."
--Notes:
The highlighted "ride son" should be "rides on".
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Maids (on the your room square/tile of the Wayfort)
/Cleaning



--Typo:
"Her eyes glitter..."
--Suggested Fix:
"Her eyes glitter..."
--Notes:
Double space between "Her" and "eyes".



--Notes:
The highlighted sentence, and the rest of the paragraph by extent, has mistakenly been broken into two.
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[MistressAzula]

Part 4
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Old Forest, on the square/tile that leads to the Wayfort



--Notes:
The highlighted text doesn't make sense. My character didn't kill the Alraune, so it should not say it's abandoned.
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Drifa, invited to the Wayfort (on the tower square/tile of the Wayfort)
/Settled In



--Typo:
"In any event, a baron's work is never done."
--Suggested Fix:
"In any event, a baroness' work is never done."
--Notes:
As my character is a woman, "baroness" is not only massively preferred but is also consistent with the title (Marcher-Baroness).
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Drifa, approaching you after first time selecting [Flirt]



--Typo:
"...you cast your focus to the blues of her blue and..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...you cast your focus to the blues of her eyes and..."
--Notes:
The highlighted word "blue" should be "eyes".
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Drifa, first time sexing
/Sex




--Notes:
When you select [Sex] for the first time, it shows Drifa naked portrait. Then after selecting [Next] to go to the next 'page' of text, her portrait reverts to being clothed again. Shouldn't it be the other way around (clothed -> naked)?



--Typo:
"...your erection.Reduced to concupiscent haze..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...your erection. Reduced to a concupiscent haze..."
--Notes:
Needs a space between the sentences where the highlighted text is. In addition, shouldn't there be "a" between "to" and "concupiscent"?


--Notes:
On another note (but on the same topic), is it an oversight that the [Fingering] sex option disappears after the first time?
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Drifa
/Spend Time/Date/.../Outdoors/Okay



--Notes:
The highlighted dialogue should be italicised and it is missing a quotation mark at the start.
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Drifa
/Sex/Facesitting



--Notes:
At the top of the screenshot: missing a word at the highlighted text (assumably "Drifa").
At the top of the screenshot: missing a word(s) at the highlighted text.



--Notes:
At the top of the screenshot: missing a word.
At the bottom of the screenshot: the highlighted word "handss" should be "hand", and is also missing a word.
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[MistressAzula]

Part 5
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Drifa
/Sex/Missionary



--Notes:
The highlighted sentence needs a space/break between it and the paragraph above it.



--Notes:
The highlighted word "you" should be capitalised "You".
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Etheryn
/Sex/Lingerie Model/Fuck Her



--Typo:
"...filling her belly until it's swelling against your soft belly, jiggling with gravid weight"
--Suggested Fix:
"...filling her belly until it's swelling against your soft belly, jiggling with gravid weight."
--Notes:
There's a double space between the highlighted "belly" and "until", and the sentence is missing a period after "weight".
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Elthara (Palace of Ice)
/Sex/Oral/Don't Give



--Typo:
"You give it a demonstrative tap..."
--Suggested Fix:
"You give it a demonstrative tap..."
--Notes:
Double space between the highlighted "it" and "a".
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Imps, victory against them (Frostwood)




--Notes:
The upgraded imps encounter in the Frostwood (after Winter City or whatever triggers it) have the same post-battle scene as the ones in the Undermountain.
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Astraea, Hawkethorne (at the village centre)



--Typo:
"...with her head down, so might very well be asleep..."
--Suggested Fix:
"...with her head down, she might very well be asleep..."
--Notes:
The highlighted word "so" should be "she".
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