[0.5.3] Error Megapost Part 16

MistressAzula

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Errors found in version [0.5.3], Megapost Part 16
I'm playing the downloadable version, not on a browser.

This is my typo reporting format, in the brackets:
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Character or scene, including the quest if any, usually what is listed at the upper right in-game above the portrait
/Inputs or choices leading to scene, if any, divided by forward-slashes '/' like an address in windows explorer

Screenshot of typo(s)/error(s), with outlining in pink
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If no screenshot: Quote, direct from the game and unaltered, usually a paragraph, identified by the quotations the line before and after it. Unfortunately, I lose italicised and bolded text since I'm using a basic text editor to record, but I do note when there's such missing or unnecessarily present.
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-Typo from the text in the quote, sometimes multiple
-Suggestion(s) for a fix to the typo by moi
-Any notes, usually if I'm unsure about it
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Preface:
I've upgraded to the most recent public version [0.5.3] and have verified what entries I have compiled still exist (sadly, nearly all). Took out the Kinu flashback, Atani after-wedding, and Atani marital sex entries; I don't think the things I found questionable were errors in those. I removed the character creation and Kaina kuddle entries because they have been corrected since version [0.4.14]. I've also taken the time to order the entries so they match up more relevantly, such as all the Land of Milky Honey quest related entries are together. I took screenshots of all but one or two I couldn't get and outlined the errors, for convenience, etc.

Because of the limit of 10 attatched files (screenshots), I have to split this into multiple parts.

It's unfortunate that most of these typos have been around since I started reading in version [0.3.7], or as early as they were added into the game. After a while I couldn't stand seeing these errors persist and started working on compiling typos and grammatical errors. Also, I couldn't help myself with pointing out a few places where better wording could exist, if I dare so may.



Approximate Contents (by Character / Scene Title) (May be missing a few)

-Ahmri & Atani (Harbouring a Fugitive)
-Unitaur (Genova) (Harbouring a Fugitive)
-Party after saving Taldahs and the Centaur village, choosing to enjoy the party with Ahmri
-Escorting Naiyana to the Marefolk village after saving Taldahs and the Centaur village
-After choosing to fight Taldahs and kill him (Harbouring a Fugitive)
-Atani
-Taldahs, after saving him and the centaur village
-Eubicha
-Choosing flowers to propose to Ahmri with
-Genova, when readying for Ahmri and your wedding



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Ahmri & Atani (Harbouring a Fugitive)
Atani/CentaurRescue/Rescue Time

88 Centaur rescue.png

-Typo: ...confrontation would be. Not good.
-Suggested Fix: ...confrontation would be... not good.
-Note: Not a typo per se, but grammatically it doesn't sound right.
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Unitaur (Genova) (Harbouring a Fugitive)
/Fuck Her

89 Unitaur badend.png

-Typo 1: ...I love a man who takes...
-Suggested Fix: ...I love a woman who takes...
-Typo 2: ...thrust your hips in a madman's pace.
-Suggested Fix: ...thrust your hips in a madwoman's pace.
-Note: My character is a woman, regardless of genitalia, and although it may be minor I think this sounds better.
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Party after saving Taldahs and the Centaur village, choosing to enjoy the party with Ahmri
/Find/Dance

90 Ahmri dance.png

-Typo: ...music drops to a slow balad...
-Suggested Fix: ...music drops to a slow ballad...
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Escorting Naiyana to the Marefolk village after saving Taldahs and the Centaur village

91 Naiyana return.png

-Typo: ...by this point sun-kissed golden mare's guards...
-Suggested Fix: ...by this point the sun-kissed golden mare's guards...
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After choosing to fight Taldahs and kill him (Harbouring a Fugitive)
/Attack

92 Taldahs kill.png

-Note: Your character's speech in the quotations isn't italicised and it should be.
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Atani

95 Atani centaurs.png

-Note: After completing Harbouring a Fugitive and saving the centaurs, the tooltip for [Centaurs] dialogue choice with Atani doesn't make as much sense.
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Taldahs, after saving him and the centaur village

96 Taldahs.png

-Typo: ...help any left over doubters...
-Suggested Fix: ...help any leftover doubters...
-Note: Leftover is one word, right?
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Eubicha
/Recruit

97 Eubicha recruit.png

-Typo: ...how much a workhorse she is...
-Suggested Fix: ...how much of a workhorse she is...
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Choosing flowers to propose to Ahmri with
/Pick Flowers

125 Picking Flowers.png

-Note: Two errors. First is that it looks like there should be a break after 'tension', with a new paragraph starting with 'Azyrran'. Second is that Azyrran's dialogue isn't italicised and it should be.
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Genova, when readying for Ahmri and your wedding

126 Ahmri wedding prep.png

-Typo: ...the lucky groom!...
-Suggested Fix: ...the lucky bride!...
-Note: My character is a woman; it should be bride, not groom. I know some won't consider this a typo because of the whole bride and groom dynamic, but I think that's stupid. I want it to be bride and bride.
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