[0.5.3] Error Megapost Part 12

MistressAzula

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Errors found in version [0.5.3], Megapost Part 12
I'm playing the downloadable version, not on a browser.

This is my typo reporting format, in the brackets:
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Character or scene, including the quest if any, usually what is listed at the upper right in-game above the portrait
/Inputs or choices leading to scene, if any, divided by forward-slashes '/' like an address in windows explorer

Screenshot of typo(s)/error(s), with outlining in pink
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If no screenshot: Quote, direct from the game and unaltered, usually a paragraph, identified by the quotations the line before and after it. Unfortunately, I lose italicised and bolded text since I'm using a basic text editor to record, but I do note when there's such missing or unnecessarily present.
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-Typo from the text in the quote, sometimes multiple
-Suggestion(s) for a fix to the typo by moi
-Any notes, usually if I'm unsure about it
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Preface:
I've upgraded to the most recent public version [0.5.3] and have verified what entries I have compiled still exist (sadly, nearly all). Took out the Kinu flashback, Atani after-wedding, and Atani marital sex entries; I don't think the things I found questionable were errors in those. I removed the character creation and Kaina kuddle entries because they have been corrected since version [0.4.14]. I've also taken the time to order the entries so they match up more relevantly, such as all the Land of Milky Honey quest related entries are together. I took screenshots of all but one or two I couldn't get and outlined the errors, for convenience, etc.

Because of the limit of 10 attatched files (screenshots), I have to split this into multiple parts.

It's unfortunate that most of these typos have been around since I started reading in version [0.3.7], or as early as they were added into the game. After a while I couldn't stand seeing these errors persist and started working on compiling typos and grammatical errors. Also, I couldn't help myself with pointing out a few places where better wording could exist, if I dare so may.



Approximate Contents (by Character / Scene Title) (May be missing a few)

-Honey Golem, pre-battle (Land of Milky Honey)
-Honey Golem, victory against it, sex (Land of Milky Honey)
-Honey Golem, victory against it, sex (Land of Milky Honey)
-Honey Golem, defeated by it (Land of Milky Honey)
-Hornet Hive, honey room (1st floor)
-Jyrranaz, defeated by her (Land of Milky Honey)
-Jyrranaz, defeated by her (Land of Milky Honey)
-Hornet Hive, one of the rooms before Queen Nyzerrah's (4th floor)(Land of Milky Honey)
-Queen Nyzarrah, victory against her (Land of Milky Honey)
-Queen Nyzarrah, victory against her (Land of Milky Honey)



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Honey Golem, pre-battle (Land of Milky Honey)

104 Honey Golem intro.png

-Typo: ...around the key wobbles...
-Suggested Fix: ...around the whip wobbles...
-Note: From context, especially right before this paragraph or so, this should be whip, not key.
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Honey Golem, victory against it, sex (Land of Milky Honey)
/Fuck It Out/Pound It Out

115 Honey Golem pound.png

-Typo: ...all around your sheathed member...
-Note: My character's penis is not sheathed. It's a knotted human cock. Maybe it's making the assumption of being canine based on the presence of the knot(?).
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Honey Golem, victory against it, sex (Land of Milky Honey)
/Fuck It Out/Pound It Out

116 Honey Golem pounded.png

-Typo: ...going wild for your dicks...
-Suggested Fix: ...going wild for your dick...
-Note: My character has only one penis. I've noticed this error multiple times; scenes that say plural or play a variant for when you have multiple, despite only having one. Curious indeed.
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Honey Golem, defeated by it (Land of Milky Honey)

117 Honey Golem badend.png

-Typo: ...can stop her forcing you...
-Suggested Fix: ...can stop her from forcing you...
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Hornet Hive, honey room (1st floor)

105 Honey Room.png

-Note: I'd like to point out that fresh honey is not thick and flow slowly 'like molasses'. Thickness in honey comes from store-bought honey, especially if it's been stilling awhile or been chilled/refrigerated. Fresh honey is much runnier. So the 'flowing like molasses' bit bothers me since it's suppose to be fresh.
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Jyrranaz, defeated by her (Land of Milky Honey)

118 Jyrranaz badend.png

-Typo: ...you aren’t even close to done...
-Suggested Fix: ...you aren’t even close to being done...
-Note: I don't think this is necessarily wrong, rather that it'd read better this way.
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Jyrranaz, defeated by her (Land of Milky Honey)

119 Jyrranaz badend.png

-Typo: ...in all her red-skinned horsecocked glory...
-Suggested Fix 1: ...in all her red-skinned, horse-cocked glory...
-Suggested Fix 2: ...in all her red-skinned and horse-cocked glory...
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Hornet Hive, one of the rooms before Queen Nyzerrah's (4th floor)(Land of Milky Honey)

106 Hive trap.png

-Note: This isn't a typo, rather something that has bothered me. The fact that this comes out of no-where and is never referenced again, especially the 'Has someone else been here already...?' part. It really bothers me. Am I the only one mystified by this seemingly random and pointless scene that doesn't seem to have any connection to anything? Also who was this someone that's already been there? It doesn't seem to make sense for Kassyra to have left it. Also, how would the vesparans make their way through that corridor with it still there intact before you get there? Sorry if this seems unwarranted but it has bothered me every time I have come upon this part of the game.
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Queen Nyzarrah, victory against her (Land of Milky Honey)
/Talk

107 Nyzarrah post-battle talk.png

-Typo: ... The handmaidens ...
-Note: There's an unfinished sentence 'The handmaidens' that is cut-off.
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Queen Nyzarrah, victory against her (Land of Milky Honey)
/Talk

108 Nyzerrah pb talk.png

-Typo: ...incredible thick horse dick...
-Suggested Fix: ...incredibly thick horse dick...
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