(0.5.20) Annika meeting typos/errors

[luciel1331]

1. Dialogue about dawnsword:

Already been mentioned in another report, but PC says the dawnsword is in storage (at home) even if PC has is equipped. Dialogue works fine if PC did actually leave it in storage though.

2. Below is from dialogue that occurs right after beating the trolls:

Repetition. I think it either needs to have one of the thousand removed or add, "and."

dialogue that appears for bimbo champ. might be just me but feels like the highlighted sentence should be at the end of that paragraph. seems weird to start off with that then say you're welcome.

Only occurs for dk champ. Not sure if it's linked to Ryn's confidence but in this save is she's at low-med confidence. Should be, "How does she know who we are." Also, feels like it should be separated from the ryn's speech part since PC is speaking to avoid confusion. Should also be italicized.

3. All the screenshots below are missing a quote mark at the end.

cult talk scene.

the keep talk scene.

lumia? talk scene.

occurs after, "what next?" button.

 

[Alypia]

2. Below is from dialogue that occurs right after beating the trolls:
[redacted]
Repetition. I think it either needs to have one of the thousand removed or add, "and."

It's intentional for literary effect.

dialogue that appears for bimbo champ. might be just me but feels like the highlighted sentence should be at the end of that paragraph. seems weird to start off with that then say you're welcome.

Also intentional.

Only occurs for dk champ. Not sure if it's linked to Ryn's confidence but in this save is she's at low-med confidence. Should be, "How does she know who we are." Also, feels like it should be separated from the ryn's speech part since PC is speaking to avoid confusion. Should also be italicized.

That's a writing error. Occurs because you've got Ryn below High Confidence but above Low Confidence, and because I forgot to write that version (or deleted it accidentally, not sure which). Additions in bold blue:

"I[etheryn.lowConfidence
|, um… c-could you call me Ryn instead? Please?" The younger elf swallows. "And I know you said it before, but… h-how
| appreciate that. If it's all right with you, though, I'd really like you to call me Ryn." She [etheryn.highConfidence|flashes a look just as friendly as the valkyrie's. "By the way, how|manages a hesitant smile. "Um, by the way… how]
] do you know who we are?"

Thanks for picking up on it!

3. All the screenshots below are missing a quote mark at the end.
[redacted]
cult talk scene.
[redacted]
the keep talk scene.
[redacted]
lumia? talk scene.
[redacted]
occurs after, "what next?" button.

Those are all intentional. It's actually necessary to do this to follow English grammatical rules. When you have a paragraph that ends in dialogue followed by another paragraph that begins with dialogue from the same character, you drop the quotation mark at the end of the paragraph to indicate that the speaker isn't changing.

 

[luciel1331]

It's intentional for literary effect.

Also intentional.

That's a writing error. Occurs because you've got Ryn below High Confidence but above Low Confidence, and because I forgot to write that version (or deleted it accidentally, not sure which). Additions in bold blue:

Thanks for picking up on it!


Those are all intentional. It's actually necessary to do this to follow English grammatical rules. When you have a paragraph that ends in dialogue followed by another paragraph that begins with dialogue from the same character, you drop the quotation mark at the end of the paragraph to indicate that the speaker isn't changing.

Fack. Sorry I keep making mistakes in grammar (swear I'm working on it!). Thanks for keep correcting me on it.