Head Inside
. . . situated close by to let diners back in both warmth and light . . . |"bask"?
Salamanders
. . . trying desperately to prove that blood wasn’t going to out, that she wasn’t cursed by her loser parents - |Maybe missing "win"?
Family
A smirk. “Yeeah, I guess. You know what they say . . . |Unsure if typo or exaggeration
. . . and steps over to the back to refill it. “I guess when dad . . . |Unsure if typo, doesn't feel right to me. If correct ignore
Meal
“Aand we’re done,” he says, untying the apron from about his waist. |Again, unsure if typo or exaggeration
. . . situated close by to let diners back in both warmth and light . . . |"bask"?
Salamanders
. . . trying desperately to prove that blood wasn’t going to out, that she wasn’t cursed by her loser parents - |Maybe missing "win"?
Family
A smirk. “Yeeah, I guess. You know what they say . . . |Unsure if typo or exaggeration
. . . and steps over to the back to refill it. “I guess when dad . . . |Unsure if typo, doesn't feel right to me. If correct ignore
Meal
“Aand we’re done,” he says, untying the apron from about his waist. |Again, unsure if typo or exaggeration
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