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<blockquote data-quote="CrackSpaniel" data-source="post: 347411" data-attributes="member: 37273"><p>(Nyzerrah)</p><p>with something more expected in the form of</p><p>~The silly text has a space either side, so when it's not displayed, there is a double space here between "expected" and "in the form of"</p><p></p><p>They hang bare, and beads of the sweet nectar dribbles from them</p><p>dribbles from -> dribble from</p><p></p><p>Her hips are wide as though made for birthing</p><p>~Kind of awkward phrasing here. Maybe just 'She has birthing hips'</p><p></p><p>~Capitalization of queen</p><p>~The majority of the time, queen should not be capitalized. The only time when you would would be as part of a title, like Queen of the Winter City, or possibly when queen is being used in place of a name.</p><p></p><p>She's right in this, I know it[...]But I'm sorry[...]I can't fight her.</p><p>~Azzy agrees with the queen, so she's not then contradicting that when she says she can't fight; lose the 'But' in "But I'm sorry".</p><p></p><p>"I'm so sorry..." She whispers.</p><p>She whispers -> she whispers</p><p></p><p>The handmaidens [party.som|are watching you curiously</p><p>~"The handmaidens" is only for the first variation of the line and so should be inside the tag.</p><p></p><p>rubbing them down of the sticky post-fight effluvia.</p><p>rubbing them down of -> scrubbing them clean of</p><p></p><p>scrub them down with clean cloths from the sticky post-fight effluvia.</p><p>scrub them of the sticky post-fight effluvia with clean cloths.</p><p></p><p></p><p>"Stop attacking and raping people</p><p>~The quote is not in italics</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="CrackSpaniel, post: 347411, member: 37273"] (Nyzerrah) with something more expected in the form of ~The silly text has a space either side, so when it's not displayed, there is a double space here between "expected" and "in the form of" They hang bare, and beads of the sweet nectar dribbles from them dribbles from -> dribble from Her hips are wide as though made for birthing ~Kind of awkward phrasing here. Maybe just 'She has birthing hips' ~Capitalization of queen ~The majority of the time, queen should not be capitalized. The only time when you would would be as part of a title, like Queen of the Winter City, or possibly when queen is being used in place of a name. She's right in this, I know it[...]But I'm sorry[...]I can't fight her. ~Azzy agrees with the queen, so she's not then contradicting that when she says she can't fight; lose the 'But' in "But I'm sorry". "I'm so sorry..." She whispers. She whispers -> she whispers The handmaidens [party.som|are watching you curiously ~"The handmaidens" is only for the first variation of the line and so should be inside the tag. rubbing them down of the sticky post-fight effluvia. rubbing them down of -> scrubbing them clean of scrub them down with clean cloths from the sticky post-fight effluvia. scrub them of the sticky post-fight effluvia with clean cloths. "Stop attacking and raping people ~The quote is not in italics [/QUOTE]
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