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<blockquote data-quote="CrackSpaniel" data-source="post: 347409" data-attributes="member: 37273">(Prince Nyze)A figure strides into view from the right side of the balcony, the crude-carved stairs caking in honey with every step they take.~Honey is just appearing on the stairs?the crude-carved stairs caking in honey with every step they take. -&gt; the honey dripping from their body caking the crude-carved stairs with every step they take.He snaps his fingers and two of the milking drones turned;milking drones turned; -&gt; milking drones turn around;the pair gather scattered clothes and rush to his side.rush to his side -&gt; rush to his side to fit them~As written, it's not clear that the &quot;scattered clothes&quot; are his and not the drones.The drones immediately move aside as a trio of lusty drone bimbos clamber up the stairsThe drones -&gt; The drones thendrone bimbos -&gt; bimbos~Too many references to drones in this scene; it makes it unclear who is being talked about in places.Even a few of the hornets grab his beautiful hairEven a few of the hornets -&gt; A few of the hornets evenwreathing it around shafts or tightening it into tight strands to thrust their hips back and forth across it like a wooden horse.into tight strands to thrust their hips back and forth across it like a wooden horse -&gt; into strands they can ride and thrust their hips back and forth across like a wooden horseply them from the bossy drone now. For now, you should resume your journeybossy drone now -&gt; bossy drone at the moment</blockquote>

[QUOTE="CrackSpaniel, post: 347409, member: 37273"] (Prince Nyze) A figure strides into view from the right side of the balcony, the crude-carved stairs caking in honey with every step they take. ~Honey is just appearing on the stairs? the crude-carved stairs caking in honey with every step they take. -> the honey dripping from their body caking the crude-carved stairs with every step they take. He snaps his fingers and two of the milking drones turned; milking drones turned; -> milking drones turn around; the pair gather scattered clothes and rush to his side. rush to his side -> rush to his side to fit them ~As written, it's not clear that the "scattered clothes" are his and not the drones. The drones immediately move aside as a trio of lusty drone bimbos clamber up the stairs The drones -> The drones then drone bimbos -> bimbos ~Too many references to drones in this scene; it makes it unclear who is being talked about in places. Even a few of the hornets grab his beautiful hair Even a few of the hornets -> A few of the hornets even wreathing it around shafts or tightening it into tight strands to thrust their hips back and forth across it like a wooden horse. into tight strands to thrust their hips back and forth across it like a wooden horse -> into strands they can ride and thrust their hips back and forth across like a wooden horse ply them from the bossy drone now. For now, you should resume your journey bossy drone now -> bossy drone at the moment [/QUOTE]

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