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Message: <blockquote data-quote="CrackSpaniel" data-source="post: 347408" data-attributes="member: 37273">(Kiyoko's Home)As for the fields, rows of tilled earth belie crops, some of which you recognise and others you don't.~"belie" doesn't really makes sense to me here. her ability to coax the earth into bringing forth its fruits is shaping up to be legendary~The period after "legendary" is on a new line.(Kiyoko)The sound of another person's voice is something you take for granted, until you do not.~'You take it for granted and then you don't'; this line isn't really saying anything. .The memories this will evoke in the both of us make my eyes water...~Missing space before "The"Now that you can see the spread laid out before you,~I suggest 'With it on the table, you can now see the spread laid out before you:'</blockquote>

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