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If you want folks to be able to read and check your project, you need to post a link to it.
Preferably, a link to the Google Document you wrote on, with comments enabled. It would look like this.
See the other threads for examples.
Preferably, a link to the Google Document you wrote on, with comments enabled. It would look like this.
See the other threads for examples.
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Deleted member 34547
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It's good, and you've passed the initial hurdle of writing something grammatically correct that flows well and is something someone could conceivably get off to.
There is a problem with putting words in the PCs mouth when it should be vaguer so as to not ruin anyone's immersion, but that is fixable. I personally would love to have you around to submit missing bits and pieces, and will give a more detailed suggestions pass once I am on my actual computer instead of my phone.
There is a problem with putting words in the PCs mouth when it should be vaguer so as to not ruin anyone's immersion, but that is fixable. I personally would love to have you around to submit missing bits and pieces, and will give a more detailed suggestions pass once I am on my actual computer instead of my phone.
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Deleted member 34547
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Thanks! I'm glad you deem it fappable enough. Though I didn't realize my dialogue sounded biased/forced, so please tell me which parts I need to modify, and if there's anything else I can do to make it better.
I have a question though: do I need to get permission from the character's creator (in this case Nonesuch) before I do anything else?
TheShepard256
Well-Known Member
Strictly speaking, no, Fen has the final say in everything that goes in-game. However, it's considered impolite not to, so I'd recommend 'yes'.
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